Little background i am 25 years old girl who just recently moved to a new city works as a teacher lives alone in a small apartment
chapter 1
Monday Morning 1:20 AM
I was asleep than sound of footsteps outside my room woke me up i decided to look it was pitched black in apartment and the room i turned on the lamp beside me started to walk towards the door as i opened the door someone put the cloth on my month covering my nose it was probably chloroform i was knocked out within 10 sec.
i woke up finding myself in a strange room hogtied lying on a small mattress room was empty other than mattress in the center of the room
i was still in pajamas and barefoot was gagged tightly i decided to test the knots i straggled for hours after 3 hours i gave up knots were tightly secured and were out of my reach at this time i was exhausted i don't know when did i asleep again.
i was awoke by two men standing over one the men took the gagged out of month tbh it was relief i said "Who are you? , why i am here?
let me go untie me" do you remember u Miss Kate? it was sound of my students john and ryan i bet now you feel sorry about giving us F on math don't you Listen boys "i am sorry that you got F on math but i wasn't my fault that you got F u didn't studied enough no personal feelings
now let me go i won't tell anyone about this" hahahaha both started laughing not so soon miss kate this time you need to learn a lesson.
before i could say anything more they gagged me again, see you after 3 hours miss kate said john they walked off leaving me alone in the room hogtied room didn't had much light nor any clock i don't know what time is it nor the day only thing i know was that i feeling thirsty and i can't take this anymore my hands and feets were hurting.
kidnapped by Students MM/F
Not bad but one or two small points. your dialogue is a little confusing. and beings you are doing the story first person should the victim really know exactly how long they have been tied up. it is a good setup just needs a little refinement.
not a native English speaker it was my first ever story will definitely improve in upcoming parts
thanks for your feedback
Good premise but it was difficult to read due to the mistakes in grammar and sentence structure.
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Good Story and Nice One! For 1st Time writing a Story.
My Dear it's no use to struggle. But I would greatly appreciate it if you, could and would
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Good story, keep at it.
I understand what others are saying about grammar and sentence structure but to be fair if English isn’t your first language then you have done well. I know I can’t write a story in another language.
I understand what others are saying about grammar and sentence structure but to be fair if English isn’t your first language then you have done well. I know I can’t write a story in another language.
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Great start to the story, can't wait for part 2!
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