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by Rtj65
3 weeks ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Your brand of dialogue and storytelling really shone in this part, it really brought the scene vividly to life. Trent is obviously trying to make the most of the opportunity has been given here, but I don't think that either Elisa or Courtney are the type to just call it even when this is done, even...
by Rtj65
1 month ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

Great update, a lot of food for thought with this chapter. It's really hard to gauge what Julie's genuine expectations are from all this. There's something very performative about how she's doing all this despite the motivation for doing it being that Brendan had a horrible time during Red Letter Ni...
by Rtj65
1 month ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Excellent update, vividly described as always. The different personalities really shine through in situations like this, and what I really like about this is that everybody's ego is tested at some point. I'm looking forward to seeing how the next round plays out, and whether Trent will continue to r...
by Rtj65
2 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

Another great update, you've kept up the intensity throughout this chapter really well. Given what we've seen of Lexi so far, I don't think she'll be particularly impressed if she happens to find out about Mia, and I do think that all of this could end up reflecting badly on Julie. As for Mia hersel...
by Rtj65
2 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Lovely update, it's very entertaining to see how differently each of the characters are treating these games to one another, especially Trent and his subtle rigging of the game. I also really liked the little snippets of information we learned with each round of the game, it was a nice way to contin...
by Rtj65
2 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

Julie's true colours are really coming out here, I think, and while I'm excited to see her execute her plan, I'd definitely keep her at arm's length if I knew her for real! One of the things that you've done very well in this story is show how there is often more than meets the eye with some of the ...
by Rtj65
3 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

I really enjoyed this part, though it did make me wonder how much Julie is actually doing this for Brendan, compared with how much she is doing it for herself. That said, while I do feel a little bad for Mia, she went into this completely willing to do the same to Brendan, and it's not like she has ...
by Rtj65
3 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

It's pretty funny that Jackie, the person most likely to enjoy losing here, ends up winning the first game. I feel like you painted a picture of a fairly chaotic scene very well; I enjoyed seeing that play out. I'm also enjoying Trent's subtle interference with the games, and I don't blame him at al...
by Rtj65
3 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

Although I know that this isn't being done to Mia in good faith, the progression of her predicament over these first few parts has still been very satisfying. It sounds like things are going to shift in the next part, and I'm intrigued to see how Mia responds. Brendan and Julie probably have a clear...
by Rtj65
3 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Musical chairs in this context is such a simple, yet brilliant idea for a game. Pitting the girls against each other is sure to be entertaining, and though I'm sure each of them will have a different approach, I have no idea who will come out on top, and who will be the last one still tied up. I lik...
by Rtj65
3 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

This chapter is really starting to hot up now. I thought that you did a really good job of conveying all of the uncertainties going through Mia's head; she's clearly somebody who likes to have a good handle on what's going on, and things are changing almost faster than she can respond to them in thi...
by Rtj65
3 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Great start to the chapter, and straight into the action. I think this might be the first time we've seen all of the girls at the same time? It's going to be fascinating to see how they play off each other. I'm sure that some of them will be more amenable to Trent's games than others, but it's sure ...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

I don't know anything about the game in question here, but it does look like Mia is about come up on the wrong side of this bet. Really looking forward to the rest of this chapter though, I think that Mia's POV will be very illuminating. I suppose she's had a bit of an unfavourable portrayal so far,...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

I'll promise you that Elisa has learned a lesson in the last two chapters. It might not be the one that we think we should learn. And she might not have learned it in the way that we think. But she's capable of change. We'll find out what that is in Chapter 21. But before then... Trent does have a ...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

That felt like a fitting conclusion to the chapter, and I think a setback like that is probably a good thing for Courtney (even though it did mean that we missed out on finding out what was in her bag, for now at least). On the other hand, I wonder how much Elisa will be emboldened by her victory, o...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)
Replies: 81
Views: 86084

Re: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)

I finally remembered that this site wants me to constantly refresh the page before the new chapter loads in. And boy am I glad I did it. Loved the new chapter, Louise can be really devious and I love it. If I wouldn't have work in five minutes I would restart this story from the beginning just to m...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Great update, absolutely worth the wait. I don't think that either Elisa or Courtney's responses to the question were particularly surprising, but I think that speaks to how you've developed their relationships with the other girls so far. I stared directly into her eyes. I didn’t have a choice. The...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)
Replies: 81
Views: 86084

Re: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)

Fandango Thanks, as always, for your detailed insight into this latest part, it's fascinating to see your takes on the characters and events. It does help me see things in a different light sometimes and look at my writing from a different perspective, which is always helpful. I realize that this i...
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: The Domme Nextdoor (F/M)
Replies: 21
Views: 10117

Re: The Domme Nextdoor (F/M)

Excellent start - you've definitely got something promising building here. The tone you've struck is right up my street, so I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next!
by Rtj65
4 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)
Replies: 81
Views: 86084

Re: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 17 Added - 25/07/23)

Part 18 March 2019 The long, drawn-out sound of Louise unzipping her boot fills the room, the action performed deliberately slowly. I know it is, because I’ve seen Louise take these very boots off several times, and it never takes this long. She even makes a show of slipping off the footwear, slidi...
by Rtj65
5 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)
Replies: 81
Views: 86084

Re: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 17 Added - 25/07/23)

Proud to say that I'm fully caught up to the story now though I'm really curious to learn what exactly caused the rift between the narrator and Louise. They were awesome together and I hope they can talk over their dispute. Thank you for the feedback, glad that you're enjoying it - I'm working on t...
by Rtj65
6 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Great part, your dialogue really brings this to life, and we learn so much about the characters without the need for much exposition. I felt a bit bad for Trent, but I'm not sure how much can be read into Courtney and Elisa's answers when they could potentially have been winding him up. As he noted ...
by Rtj65
6 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)
Replies: 213
Views: 92260

Re: Kaleidoscope: No Proscenium (M/F, FFFF+/M, MM/MF, F/M. F/F, etc.)

You weren't kidding with the disclaimer on this part - that was intense, yet I think it also contributed to the portrayal of a really positive, healthy relationship. It's made for a nice contrast to some of the more dramatic scenes you've written so far, but no less compelling. Keep up the good work!
by Rtj65
6 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)
Replies: 368
Views: 285691

Re: Capture Club (F/M, FM/F, FM/F, M/F, F/M, M/F, MM/FF, F/F...etc.)

Welcome back, great to see this continuing, it's always a treat to read a new chapter. Really looking forward to seeing what Courtney has in store for Trent here, and especially compared to last time. I can't remember if I've said something along these lines before, but I genuinely think that Elisa ...
by Rtj65
6 months ago
Forum: Fictional Stories For Adults
Topic: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 18 Added - 30/10/23)
Replies: 81
Views: 86084

Re: Causality (F/M, FF/M) (Part 17 Added - 25/07/23)

Had the chance to catch up to your stories. I remember reading the first few parts awhile back but haven't been on the site for awhile till now so glad to see you still got some really good updates out. Keep up the good work! Thank you so much, it's great to hear that you're enjoying the story! I i...