A Game F/FF, FF/FF, etc.
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Great idea, but could you have them talk in more conversational language? They talk very formally. Slang, contractions, that kind of thing would really help.
But you have a great concept here, please continue....
But you have a great concept here, please continue....
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I dunno. The story and concept is a lot of fun and interesting but...
I just couldn't give any less craps about her backstory, her parents backstory or her grandma's backstory.
I understand you're wanting to build a story with Characters with depth and such but I just don't think it fits in at all with the story itself.
I just couldn't give any less craps about her backstory, her parents backstory or her grandma's backstory.
I understand you're wanting to build a story with Characters with depth and such but I just don't think it fits in at all with the story itself.
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I agree wholeheartedly.Dr_Depravo wrote: ↑4 years ago I dunno. The story and concept is a lot of fun and interesting but...
I just couldn't give any less craps about her backstory, her parents backstory or her grandma's backstory.
I understand you're wanting to build a story with Characters with depth and such but I just don't think it fits in at all with the story itself.
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Amazing story. Keep up the great work. Can't wait to hear the next part.
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Excellent writing and story. Love the twists and turns of the plot. Keep up the great job.
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love it. great twist and character addition.
Great part! I liked the conversation in the shower between Amanda and Shannon. I hope Erika will get some of her own medicine. Beautiful Outfit for Amanda!!
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Great addition. Love the story. Can't wait for the next part. Keep up the amazing work.
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awesome chapter. great twist. very creative.
I enjoyed this chapter very much The complete Story is great.